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Hi Rami,

That sounds like a fun project! Since you have it planned out, here are a few suggestions.

Will you be writing this essay in third person or first? Third person is better if you want to have more flexibility of perspective, which could be especially helpful if you have a lot of different characters. First person is better if you’re really trying to dig into the emotions and motives of a single protagonist.

You might also want to sketch out the rules of your society. Even going through the exercise of writing out the rules before you dig into the narrative can help you stay true to a consistent setting.
Also if you are doing something fairly character heavy, a similar sketch for each character might help you in a similar way.

Happy writing!

For example in first-person I might write: “I have learned a great deal about personal independence and responsibility since starting university. First, I found out how important it is for me to manage my budget so that I don’t run out of money for food and laundry before the end of the month. I now know that it costs about $400 to eat and $30 to do laundry for the month and I set this aside on the first.”

Now, I will transform those same thoughts to a third person formal essay: “Students learn a lot about personal independence and responsibility when starting university. One critical step is understanding how to manage a personal budget in order to ensure that essentials such as food and laundry are covered throughout the month. Jane Doe, a fake financial expert at Fidelity Advisors, says that students should plan to set aside about $400 for food every month and should track their expenses using a budgeting app or spreadsheet in order to not go over budget.”

Do you see the difference?

Happy writing!
Naomi

Hi there,
You’ll want to rewrite any sentences containing the word “I”, me, or my.
For example, “I think dogs are cute.” becomes “Dogs are cute.”
or “In my opinion, the Warriors should have won.” becomes “The Warriors should have won.”

If you need more help, you could submit your essay to the Kibin editors who could help change your paper to third person so that you can see exactly how that works for next time. You can learn more about our editing service here: https://www.kibin.com/essay-editing-proofreading (If you do decide to try it, make sure to state that you need help changing to 3rd person in your instructions.)

Best,
Naomi